The red wine was warm, sweet and sickly.

Not to his taste at all, although he pretended to enjoy it. He smiled at his companion after taking another sip. He liked this part of the chase; the teasing. He knew he would be quenching his real thirst very shortly.

This is my first attempt at writing a piece of flash fiction for Red’s Flash in the Pan challenge. The limit for this particular challenge, Wine, is fifty words. I just about made it with 49.

Posted by Tom Merriman

A future writer living in the present day

40 Comments

  1. BRAVO! Well done – My hat is off to YOU!

    I’ve only ever done ONE flash fiction story. Here’s a link: http://tuesdayswithlaurie.com/2012/02/21/short-storyflash-fiction-challenge/

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    1. Thank you, Laurie!
      I’m off to read your story now!

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  2. As always with you TL, you have already hooked the fish and have begun reeling them in….Good one! VK

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    1. Thank you, VK. πŸ™‚

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  3. Fab flash! Send me an email so I can get you the particulars. I am glad to have you join us.

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    1. Thanks, Red. I’ve sent you an email (hopefully!)
      I’m having a computer ‘off day’ today, so hopefully you’ll receive it as well…

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      1. No, it did not go to any email I answer, which means you probably sent it to the spam address attached to Gravatar. Let me see if I can rescue it.

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        1. Thanks, Red. I’ve received an email from Val, so it looks like you sorted it – sorry about the confusion there!
          I’m going to stick with the blog-hop for now; I want to practice writing first – the flashes seem a good way to practice fitting in what I want to say in a limited amount of words! πŸ™‚

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  4. Nice One πŸ˜‰ ………….i’ve never done these πŸ™‚ but FUNNNN πŸ™‚

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    1. Thank you! I like writing short tales, but this is the first time I’ve had a go at writing a piece of flash fiction, Cat. It was fun!

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      1. πŸ™‚ πŸ™‚ πŸ™‚ well done πŸ™‚ x

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          1. it’s amazing how many styles of writing there are – i could never do flash fiction – poetry and lyrics and weird stories yes – but – Flash fiction takes a certain je ne c’est quoi ? πŸ˜‰ πŸ™‚

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            1. Yes, there are lots of different styles, Cat. I like writing short stories, but, like this flash piece, the full story goes beyond the number of words. I would love to be able to get a full story in, say, a hundred words. Fifty is definitely pushing it at the moment!

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              1. I can see That – one word can hold so much ……… It’s pretty amazing πŸ™‚

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                1. I agree! Getting the right words in the right order is an art form in itself!

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  5. Wickedly inviting, Tom.
    W.o.W. “He knew he would be quenching his real thirst very shortly.”

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    1. Thanks, Tess. I’m wondering if I’ve left this a little too open…

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  6. I imagine the next fifty words in this tale get very R-rated , Tom β€” and hopefully it’s not because you hurled bad wine!

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    1. Quite possibly, LA, although where the tale goes after those 49 words is up to the reader! I can say there was no hurling in my version, however!

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      1. Hurling would be in mine, Tom!

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  7. Excellent writing. You set the scene perfectly. That one extra word would have ruined it! πŸ˜‰

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    1. Thanks, Ellie. I may try to always write one word less from now on! πŸ˜‰

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  8. You have certainly engaged
    with this fine offering Tom πŸ™‚ πŸ˜‰
    Enjoy your Flashing times…

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    1. Thanks, Andro. I can but try…

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  9. I like it … and I would have done the same thing because warm, sweet, and wine just don’t go well together … then again, the chase would be one of the few places for it. πŸ˜‰

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    1. Warm wine doesn’t sound the best, does it Frank? Maybe the smile was more of a grimace…

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  10. I would never describe red wine as sickly………maybe that’s my problem…….hiccup.

    Excellent response, Tom.

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    1. I prefer white or rose myself, Andra… but I like Merlot, which I remember being red.
      And thank you!

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  11. That is one fantastic piece..well done Tom πŸ™‚

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    1. Thank you for saying so, Soma!

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  12. Clever and as always you leave your reader Thirsting for More! πŸ™‚

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    1. Yes… I’m going to try and get at least one tale told completely in one of these posts, Sue. I will do. One day! πŸ˜€

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  13. ’tis a good…erm… taster, Sir Aquatom, πŸ™‚ …. there’s something about holding a wine glass, that’s sort of … strewth can’t find the words… but.. it enriches the drinking?… almost adds to the experience… kind of… I like wine anywho, … πŸ™‚ xx

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    1. I like wine as well, Lady P. I’d mistyped there, and entered wind instead. Wine glass, bottle or cup… it all tastes the same to me. Well, each different wine tastes different, but the same wine… I’m rambling. There’s a way to drink wine properly, I think. And there’s my way…

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  14. Totally enjoyed that ! It was an awesome piece.! Seriously! Just by reading those 49 words, I know what happened before and what’s going to happen in the near future AND keep the story going!

    BTW….he’s a vampire right??!!!??? πŸ˜‰

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    1. Thanks, Shree, I enjoyed writing this one.
      And yes, he is a vampire!

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  15. this is a nice flash, I like how you get the man’s intention clearly delivered to us

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    1. I’m pleased that you like it, Novroz. I think that he knows exactly what he wants!

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