The Unicorn Challenge: Shipmates


“Miles,” Estelle whispered, “if ‘aft’ is the back of the boat, what’s the stern?”

Miles pulled his blanket over him as he slowly sat up on the makeshift bunk. “That’s the back of the boat, too.”

“So the boat has two backs?” Estelle pondered a while before continuing, “I only saw one back when we came on board.”

“There is only one back, Estelle,” Miles wrapped the blanket tighter around him, “it depends where you are. Inside it’s the aft, and outside it’s the stern.”

“Ah, I see.” Estelle settled herself down in her bunk, then sat up again. “So we’re in the aft, then?”

“That’s right. Why do you ask?”

“It was when I was up on the deck earlier, I heard the captain telling one of his officers to check aft and stern, port and starboard, leaving nothing unturned…” Estelle lay herself down again and snuggled into her blanket.

“When was this?” Miles flung his blanket off him and sat on the side of his bunk, just as the trapdoor in the ceiling above dropped down. A lantern then filled the room they were in with a bright yellow light.

“They’re down here!” The voice of the crewman shouted to a colleague, before laughing, “At least these two stowaways don’t need escorting to the brig, they’re already there!”

“About an hour ago.” Estelle whispered, realising she should have mentioned something sooner.


The Uncorn Challenge from Jenne Gray and C E Ayr is a writing challenge based on an image one or the other (or both) provide, as long as the word count doesn’t exceed 250 words.

17 responses to “The Unicorn Challenge: Shipmates”

  1. clark avatar

    Very cool.
    Being familiar with the language and jargon of ships I got caught up from the first sentence. Then, as the interplay of two characters continued, I tried to figure out ‘the hook’.
    (Old cultural reference: I got a link in my head to an old Burns and Allen routine. I will spare you my effort to relate one of theme. That’s why god invented youtube.)
    The ending surprised me. A sign of a good story, fer sure.

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    1. Tom avatar

      I had no idea when I started writing this about the terminology of ships, Clark, the information managed to filter its way to me at the right time!
      I knew where I wanted to go with the two characters, but wasn’t sure this approach would work… but it seems to have done so OK, so I’m happy with it! 😊

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  2. Diane Henders avatar

    Love your surprise ending! 🙂 And I learned something, too – I’m a landlubber, so I never knew about the difference between aft and stern.

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    1. Tom avatar

      Thanks, Diane! You and me both! The terms came to me as I was writing this, so I had to fit them in! 😁

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  3. jenne49 avatar

    Yes, I learned some jargon too. And an excellent twist at the end. Good story, Tom
    I hope to have one by tomorrow. I’ve been helping me auld mucker prepare a book for publication on Amazon. You may wonder why he managed to write a story and I didn’t. I’ll leave that one with you…!

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    1. Tom avatar

      Thanks, Jenne… this was quite an educational post, it seems… for me as well! 😁
      All I’m going to say is I sense that you’ve been very busy! 🙂

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  4. Sue Dreamwalker avatar

    Tom…. I just don’t know how you think these wonderful short stories up…. 🙂 But they are always brilliant 🙂

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    1. Tom avatar

      Thanks, Sue. I think I just start writing and then go with the flow! Having information fall into my lap also helps at times! 😊

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  5. The Sicilian Storyteller avatar

    A perfect case of too little, too late.

    An excellent story with a great unexpected turn of events!

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    1. Tom avatar

      Thank you… it was certainly an ‘if only…’ moment!

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      1. The Sicilian Storyteller avatar

        You’re welcome! Nice when things turn out that way.

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  6. Keith's Ramblings avatar

    Not just a great little tale, I learned something too! Nice one, Tom.

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    1. Tom avatar

      Thanks, Keith. They come in handy at times, these short tales! 🙂

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  7. Liz H avatar

    As long as they don’t get hoisted on their own petards, they should be fine…Lol!

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    1. Tom avatar

      I think they’re OK for now, Liz! 😀

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