The Saloon


Nutmeg Dolnoon slid the tankard of ale along the bar and into the thirsty clutches of Jake ‘Cesspit Yellowbelly’ Jones, as she began, and promptly stopped, serving Herbert Hatherthwaite with his spicy sarsaparilla; Maverick Mannering played wildly on the honky-tonk piano as Violet Dolnoon tried to sing and cancan along, in an attempt to diffuse the tension that had mounted between the three players on the poker table.

“One moment, Herb,” Nutmeg said as the round table was tipped over and shouted, “Father, don’t play, sort them out… they’ve all had one too many tequilas, and the bearded one in the black outfit and stetson looks like serious trouble.”

She grabbed the silver tray from behind the bar as the black-garbed Angus Blade stood and reached for his holster, and threw it across the bar room with a well practised aim, knocking Angus’s stetson off his head and temporarily stunning him at the same time.

Maverick deftly lifted Angus and threw him headfirst out through the double swinging doors into the bright and dusty afternoon sunshine, with Violet ‘gently’ escorting the other two out with a couple more cancan kicks each.

From the doors, Maverick shouted over to the bar, “I’ll see them out of town before heading back to the chapel”, as Nutmeg placed an overful glass down on the counter in front of Herbert.

“See you tomorrow, Father,” Nutmeg waved and smiled as she asked Herb, “So, have you never thought of using a nickname like Jake over there?”

Nutmeg Dolnoon

It’s another Six Sentence Story, and this week, Denise has selected Yellowbelly as the prompt word.

27 responses to “The Saloon”

  1. Paula Light avatar
    Paula Light

    Excellent! And your AI image is great too 😀

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    1. Tom avatar

      Thank you, Paula! 😊
      Some of the AIs are really good, others… erm, less so… I liked this one, but wanted to tweak it a little to make it seem dated or faded.
      I may have an AI out-take post in the works! 🤣

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  2. pennsivity avatar

    Enjoyed the short story immensely, Tom, …your characters gained life in my mind from the ‘off’ …( loving their names ). 👏

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    1. Tom avatar

      Thanks, Penn.
      I feel the characters tell the story, I’m pleased you all connected! 🙂

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      1. pennsivity avatar

        I did connect, in fact I’m twirling trays like frisbees in competition with Nutmeg Dolnoon…she won…😌

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        1. Tom avatar

          Nutmeg’s probably been at it for some time, though, Penn…

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          1. pennsivity avatar

            I know, …it’s depressing …I’ve just destroyed the saloon, …I’ve been banned for life, …😌

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            1. Tom avatar

              😳 Oh, no!
              Maybe you can go back in in a few weeks when they’ve all forgotten…

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  3. europasicewolf avatar

    Great pic of Nutmeg, Tom!

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    1. Tom avatar

      One of the better AI creations, I feel… then tweaked a little by moi! 😊 (That other AI, Spellchecker, wanted ‘moi’ to be ‘moisture’🤣)

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      1. europasicewolf avatar

        😂Oh yes…AI Spellcheckers are the absolute worst! 🤣 The root of all the most embarrassing 😳🫣 and mortifying typos faced by mortal spellers!😅😆
        It was an excellent AI creation, undoubtedly beautifully enhanced by your tweaking😀I like to have a little tweak myself, although removing extra limbs and lopping off extra heads seems to be the foremost most common of tweaks🤣

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        1. Tom avatar

          Those extra random extremities are quite comical. As are those mortifying typos, Icewolf, once the intense cringing has subsided! 😊

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          1. europasicewolf avatar

            It takes a considerable time for those typos to stop being cringeworthy Tom! Usually until an even worse one presents itself 😅

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            1. Tom avatar

              Oh yes! 😊

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  4. Susan St.Pierre avatar

    Delightful scene and tale. 😁

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    1. Tom avatar

      Thanks, Susan… pleased you think so! 🙂

      Like

  5. Frank Hubeny avatar

    Great nickname for Jake: ‘Cesspit Yellowbelly’

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    1. Tom avatar

      Thanks, Frank… yes, he’s a bit of a mystery, that one…! 🙂

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  6. Chris Hall avatar

    Nicely done, Tom!

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    1. Tom avatar

      Aw, thanks again, Chris.
      This was fun to write! 🙂

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  7. clark avatar

    What a lot of fun Six.
    The story is fun and fast moving and then, after reading, going back and taking apart the structure*
    can I get a yeee-ha!

    *to better learn technique

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    1. Tom avatar

      Yeee-ha! Clark! 😊
      Pleased you liked The Saloon! It’s normally quiet in there!

      Like

  8. Spira avatar

    Excellent storytelling, you penslinger!!

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    1. Tom avatar

      Thank you, pardner!

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  9. GirlieOnTheEdge avatar

    Yee-ha! Every saloon should have a piano playing clergyman like Maverick 😆
    Entertaining Six, Tom!

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    1. Tom avatar

      😁 Thanks, Denise! I have no idea where some of these characters come from… I’m just pleased they turn up!

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