DeNite’s Move


What started here, and continued here, now continues here! A Six Sentence Story, the prompt word set by Denise at Girlie on the Edge, is forge. A crossover featuring the Dropped Apostrophe from my side of the page, and Rue DeNite from Clark at The Wakefield Doctrine’s!


The Dropped Apostrophe and Rue DeNite walked quickly up the four flights of stairs to the second floor of the building that housed the Casino-on-Brickell-Street, a building that once was home to a multinational bank and the administrative offices to a now defunct steel forge, Art Deco wallpaper featuring gold embossed tulips on a blood-red background  surrounded them and the plush red carpets they walked on, not that they could make out many of the features with the single candle Rue carried… and after a quick succession of Manhattens and a lust for all the money in Lou Ceasare’s safe, neither were particularly bothered about the classic decor anyway.

Reaching the security door to the room that housed the vault, Rue quickly tapped an eight digit code into a numerical keypad, her black acrylic nails clacking loudly through the semi darkness… and nothing happened; Rue brought her free hand up to her mouth and giggled, leaned against the wall for balance, and breathlessly said, “Oops… no power… the door won’t open.”

Catching his breath, the Apostrophe contemplated smashing his way through the door, first by using his own brute force, and then by blowing the door off its hinges by a small dynamite charge he had in his back pocket; Rue seemed to read his mind, saying “Dropsy, it’s a reinforced security door, in lockdown because of your dampener, and one small charge won’t affect it one iota – we won’t get in until the power comes back on when I can unlock it.”

The Apostrophe thought for a second, weighing up the plans he had memorised of the building, and remembered the thin ledge that ran around the building on this level, just below the windows outside; he looked at Rue, the clothes she was wearing,  her fishnet-clad feet tucked inside her white stilettos, and the way she elegantly leant against the wall, candlelight making her facial features seem almost doll-like. “We could get in through the window,” the Apostrophe said, intently watching his accomplice’s expression for signs of a horrified change, swiftly continuing when there wasn’t one, “well, you could fit nicely on the ledge, and use my glass cutter, and I can guide you from the fire escape; if you really want half of the money, that is.”

Rue giggled again, then stopped when she saw the Apostrophe’s fixed expression… “You seriously want me to walk along the outside of the building, dressed like this, to break in through a window to my boss’ safe, take all the money and give you half, while you watch…” she saw the Apostrophe nod, grinning broadly, and reciprocated with a half-smile, “OK, but a change of plan… I now want sixty per cent.”



17 responses to “DeNite’s Move”

  1. Spira avatar

    There is a reason Queen is the strongest piece on the board😉

    Tom, your words rhythm has managed to create tension and anticipation…all hell’s gonna break loose…maybe.
    Loving this crossover.

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    1. The Sicilian Storyteller avatar

      Damn straight about the queen, Nick! ♛

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      1. Tom avatar

        … I’m saying nothing… (walks away, whistling…)

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    2. Tom avatar

      The Queen can still be defeated, Nick… 😏
      I’m pleased you’re enjoying the crossover, I’ve had fun writing it! It’s the not knowing that makes it more interesting! 🙂

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  2. The Sicilian Storyteller avatar

    This is excellent, Tom! I love this type of film noir-ish writing; it lets the writer be wildly creative, risqué and downright naughty. This was highly entertaining and descriptive as hell; if I say so myself, it reminded me of a story I wrote a while ago called Stella By Starlight. That tongue-in-cheek tale was a lot of fun to write. Kudos to you for this fab ink! 💫

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    1. Tom avatar

      Thanks, Nancy. I’m pleased you like it. Is Stella By Starlight on your site? I’m a little short on time right now, hence sporadic blog visits, but I’ll make a note to check it out if it is! 🙂

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        1. Tom avatar

          Fabulous! I’ve just checked it out! Loved it! Very atmospheric. 🙂

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  3. Frank Hubeny avatar

    Getting 60% sounds fair unless one of them ultimately wants 100%.

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    1. Tom avatar

      Well, Frank… it’s funny you say that…

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  4. europasicewolf avatar

    I think The Apostrophe is being a little bit cheeky and rather naughty with this suggestion! 60% sounds very reasonable in the circumstances! As to the dynamite in the Apostrophes pocket…well! what can I say!! He’s quite the explosive character isn’t he?!!

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    1. Tom avatar

      The Apostrophe doesn’t have the nickname ‘despicable’ for nothing, Icewolf… but he also has ‘nincompoop’, which could be revealing, I suppose! 🤣

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  5. messymimi's meanderings avatar

    They both need to remember there’s no honor among thieves.

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    1. Tom avatar

      It’s funny you mention that, Mimi…

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  7. clark avatar

    hey! this is fun*

    *not sure how long I can keep up the pace… at least until our protagonists can conclude the heist/not-heist… maybe drinks afterword

    (Miz Nite kinda has some business with the owner of a privately-held multi-national company, on Lou’s behalf but after that who knows?)

    Meet at the Secret Lair, Gulfstream 700, Tilt-A-Whirl at Adventureland, Iowa… unless we get locked out of the Six Sentence Café & Bistro I’m all in for this kind of story-writing.
    …will be back

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    1. Tom avatar

      No worries, Clark… I’ve wrapped up my parts now. It was fun to write. Rue may now return to her – and your – business! She is a fun character! 🙂

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