The Unicorn Challenge: Western Sunset


Nutmeg Dolnoon sighed as she rocked in the rickety chair on the porch of The Saloon, looking at the row of shops over the street that had been abandoned. The dulcet tones of Violet Dolnoon emanated out through the double doors, drowning out the honky-tonk piano, the perfect accompaniment to the passing tumbleweed that rolled on by.

Angus Blade, in his trademark black outfit and stetson, slowly sauntered along the middle of the road, outlined in the reddy-orange glow of the setting sun behind him. A rattlesnake hissed nearby. ‘I told you, Nutmeg, to be gone by sunset.’ He croaked as he chewed a stalk of hay.

‘And I told you,’ Nutmeg watched the sun going down, ‘I ain’t going anywhere.’

Suddenly, the door to the old ironworker’s shop over the road burst open, and Maverick Mannering, Cesspit Jones and Herbert Hatherthwaite ran out, startling Angus.

The nearby rattlesnake hissed again.

Reverend Mannering grabbed Angus’s arms, twisting them both up behind his back. ‘And I told you never to come back into Ciudad Sombra ever again.’ He twisted Angus around, and Cesspit grabbed his feet, lifting them off the ground.

Herbert helped to carry the hapless outlaw over to the horses drinking trough, where they unceremoniously dumped him into the cold water.

‘You now have a choice,’ Maverick said, as Angus came up for air, straightening his stetson, ‘be gone for good, or spend the night in your soaking clothes, in the stocks.’

The rattlesnake seemed to laugh as Angus ran the way he came, into the sunset.

© Ayr / Gray

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… a magical challenge hosted by Jenne Gray and C E Ayr. They provide a picture and we provide up to 250 words based upon it.

16 responses to “The Unicorn Challenge: Western Sunset”

  1. jenne49 avatar

    You’ve taken the stereotypes of the old westerns and crafted them into a story that made me smile out loud, Tom
    (I’ve decided ‘Herbert Hatherthwaite’ is to become my new favourite tongue-twister.)
    Love the rattlesnake.

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    1. Tom avatar

      I wanted this to seem familiar, Jenne. Thanks! 🙂

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  2. Editor, Witcraft avatar

    From the black hat to the horse trough, Sergio Leone eat your heart out. Very clever, Tom.

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    1. Tom avatar

      Thanks, Doug… just playing with the genre!

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  3. clark avatar

    yeah! what the hell (to tie to jenne’s comment)

    my favorite line “<em>The rattlesnake seemed to laugh…”</em>

    Funny thing this writing/reality creation sometimes we get all surprised

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    1. Tom avatar

      That’s the most fun part, Clark, when you let the characters lead! 😀

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  4. The Sicilian Storyteller avatar

    Memories of me as a kid sitting on the living room floor eating my Cheerios and watching B&W cowboy and indian movies back in the day when it was ok to say cowboy and indian.

    Excellent story, Tom. Clever plot and you have a real knack for names! I could almost hear the old out-of-tune piano in the saloon.

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    1. Tom avatar

      Thanks, Nancy. Yes, I wanted to play with the theme a little! 🙂

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  5. Diane Henders avatar

    …and the good guys win in the end! 🙂

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    1. Tom avatar

      Oh yes! They wouldn’t have it any other way, Diane!

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  7. ceayr avatar

    Laughing here, Tom. I like that the bad dude in the obligatory black hat turns out to be a wimp who gets run out of town so easily!

    And I hope that no horses were left thirsty by this story.

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    1. Tom avatar

      Nope, the horses were fine, CE.
      The wimp was too, afterwards! 😅

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  8. Chris Hall avatar

    Fab story, Tom!

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    1. Tom avatar

      Thanks, Chris!

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