The Unicorn Challenge: The Point


The train journey itself was unremarkable. The only odd character, who stood out, on the whole voyage, was the red-headed lady with large round sunglasses and large fake-fur coat. She sat and read the newspaper all the way, facing my direction. I tapped away on my laptop, keeping one eye on her, although she got off two stops back.

Finally, I’m at my destination, the Saint-Raphaël-Valescure, lovely place, one of my favourites after Cannes just down the road, but I’m not here to sightsee today.

I’m delivering a sealed envelope in person to a mysterious person called Mademoiselle François, at the Rue Boétman on the way to the promenade.

I walk in the sunshine to the corner, envelope in laptop bag, and notice François sitting on a step, her sunglasses an odd contrast with her full-length beige coat, topped off with a green beret. I chuckle to myself as I think she doesn’t stand out at all.

The Mediterranean sunshine is hot today. She must be uncomfortable, no wonder she’s on the step in the shade.

I decide to walk to her, then stop suddenly. Walking the other way, in the distance, I see the red-headed lady off the train. Here. Now. Trust my gut, they said.

François has also seen the woman and has started to quickly walk away from me down the rue.

I watch as she ducks out of sight, then hear ‘abort… abort’ in my earpiece.

I quickly turn around.

Posted for The Unicorn Challenge, a magical challenge hosted by Jenne Gray and C E Ayr, where they provide a photo and we, in turn, provide up to 250 words.

18 responses to “The Unicorn Challenge: The Point”

  1. ceayr avatar

    Intrigue, Tom!
    A wee bit George Smiley this week, gotta love it!

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    1. Tom avatar

      Thanks, CE! 😁
      (I had to look up George Smiley, so double thanks, in fact!)

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      1. clark avatar

        me too…. thanks, ceayr
        the fun in these bloghops is enhanced by the comments of participants offering perspective and insight beyond the story(s) themselves.

        cool

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        1. ceayr avatar

          C’mon guys, John le Carre is the master spy writer of the Cold War era, much of his work now available as movies:
          The Spy who Came in from the Cold (Richard Burton)
          The Russia House (Connery)
          Tinker Taylor Soldier Spy (Gary Oldman), which was a superb tv series with Alec Guinness
          and much more.
          Give yourselves a treat, Guinness is perfection.

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  2. rugby843 avatar

    I like this response!

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    1. Tom avatar

      Thanks, Cheryl! 🙂
      I had an interesting location, so needed to find something different to fill it with! 🙂

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  3. Editor, Witcraft avatar

    And then? And then? Don’t keep us in suspenders. 🙂

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    1. Tom avatar

      Sorry Doug… that’s just what I have done – and, with this reply too, it seems. Apologies for that as well!

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  4. The Sicilian Storyteller avatar

    Just when it was getting really good, Tom! I hate when that happens.
    Wonderful tale of intrigue and suspense. Well done!

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    1. Tom avatar

      Thanks, Nancy. Bit of a late reply here… I do apologise! We may have to try this again! 🤔

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  5. jenne49 avatar

    Nothing more intriguing than delivering a letter to a mysterious French woman.
    What? Why?
    And hiding in plain sight too – big sun glasses and big coats, both of them.
    Nobody would ever suspect them of being involved in intrigue – and yet…
    Most atmospheric, Tom, and leaving us on tenterhooks…
    Excellent.

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    1. Tom avatar

      Thsnks, Jenne.
      I think I’ve been to the Moon, or somewhere… apologies for this late reply…

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  6. clark avatar

    liked it.
    detailed without being confusing
    action without running on
    leisurely yet still a concise narrative (aka ‘beginning, middle and end’)

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    1. Tom avatar

      Thanks, Clark. It was a bit timely… unlike these replies! 😒😂

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  7. Liz H-H avatar

    You led us down the street, then left us, one foot raised, as we turn and abort.
    Fabulous!

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    1. Tom avatar

      Thanks, Liz. It was all a matter of timing… a bit like this reply, really!

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  8. Margaret avatar

    I think Mme Francois is a bit more on the ball than our narrator here. She spotted the red-headed interloper straight away. Lovely character descriptions in this. I can picture them both.

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    1. Tom avatar

      Thanks, Margaret. Yes, I think François may have a little more experience in such matters. 🙂

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