Down in the garden


Georgia heard the loud squeak from the gate at the bottom of the garden. It only ever squeaked when it was closed, never when it opened, so she knew somebody was there.

She was expecting a parcel to be delivered, and threw open the front door with gusto.

There was nothing and nobody there.

She ran down the garden path and around the large privet that obscured the view of the gate from the house.

Disappointed, she realised that nobody had actually called. The gate was swinging open and closed freely, its rusty latch on the lawn inside the garden.

This mysterious little snippet is a hundred word tale for Redโ€™s Flash In The Pan. The limit for this flash is a hundred words, funnily enough, and the word this time is โ€˜downโ€™. Even though I used one meaning of the word in the tale, it ended with another meaning.

But itโ€™s only fiction!

Thereโ€™s no feeling down here โ€“ only Feeling Good! He he he!

Visit Redโ€™s site if youโ€™d like to have a go at this writing challengeโ€ฆ there is a time limit, so like me youโ€™d better get your skates on!

19 responses to “Down in the garden”

  1. Gray Dawster avatar
    Gray Dawster

    Yes I do need to get my skates on Tom ๐Ÿ™‚ lol
    I really like this one my great friend, and there
    is mystery within the lines, perhaps her parcel
    will arrive next time. It is amazing what one can
    weave into a story that has only one hundred
    words, and yours is brilliant ๐Ÿ™‚

    Andro

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    1. Tom Merriman avatar

      That’s the magic of these flashes, Andro. They allow so much of the story to be revealed, and then open up a whole world of alternative possibilities waiting to be explored. Some flashes, anyway!
      Oh… and yes… get skating!
      Have a good weekend!

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      1. Gray Dawster avatar
        Gray Dawster

        ๐Ÿ™‚ ๐Ÿ™‚ lol

        Andro

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  2. prenin avatar

    So you’re a flasher hey Tom??? ๐Ÿ˜‰

    Love the piece though: Very suspenseful!!! ๐Ÿ™‚

    God Bless!

    Prenin.

    P.S: WordPress has worked fine for two days now, but there’s still a few bugs to be attended to!!! ๐Ÿ™‚

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    1. Tom Merriman avatar

      Only every now and again, Prenin!
      Glad you liked my little tale!
      I’m working myself up to get back into visiting and commenting properly… I’ve given myself a break to let things settle… so hopefully they have!

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  3. Let's CUT the Crap! avatar

    When I started reading, I thought you were about to reveal more happenings at the Mansion. Not only was I brought up short because this was a flash, but on both counts: Bravo. The squeak of the gate resonates. The imagery is awesome, Tom. Welcome BACK!

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    1. Tom Merriman avatar

      Thank you, Tess.
      There are some more Mansion reveals on the horizon, but for now, I’m posting a short series of flashes.
      It’s nice to be back!

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      1. Let's CUT the Crap! avatar

        Nice to have you back, Tom.
        ๐Ÿ˜‰

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  4. shreejacob avatar

    Oh that story could go so many ways!! That’s what’s really interesting reading your flash in the pan stories!!

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    1. Tom Merriman avatar

      That’s what I like about these flashes, Shree. You can write so much and open other avenues of thought… or you can get a complete tale within the limited number of words. The latter is more difficult, I must add, so I usually go for the first option!

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  5. Andra Watkins avatar

    Waiting for a parcel. It’s agony.

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    1. Tom Merriman avatar

      Even more so when it doesn’t arrive on the day you are expecting it, Andra!

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  6. Sue Dreamwalker avatar

    I am enjoying your Flashes Tom! ๐Ÿ™‚

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    1. Tom Merriman avatar

      Thank, Sue.
      I’m out for the moment, but there should be more soon!

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  7. Red avatar

    Not only no package, but now to repair the gate. Ugh.

    Love the flash!

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    1. Tom Merriman avatar

      Thanks, Red.
      Yes, she was disappointed on two counts there!

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  8. europasicewolf avatar

    All very mysterious and therefore very intriguing! ๐Ÿ™‚

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    1. Tom Merriman avatar

      Thanks, Icewolf. I like a little mystery every now and then.

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